On my Facebook page, I attempt to be as authentic as
possible. I try not to say things or post photos just to be like my peers. I
try to be as true to myself as possible online, so I believe my page is indeed
an accurate representation of who I am as a person and not just some idealized
image of who I would like to be. I maintain complete honesty on my “about me”
page, my religious and political beliefs, and my sexual orientation. This may
upset or frustrate people, but I believe in complete openness and honesty. My
posts, though seemingly controversial in nature, all represent issues that I am
passionate about and constantly involved with. My photos display my real life
activities and show who I am as a person and the sorts of things I do with my
life. There is no smoke show. My Facebook page shows me, who I am, and what I
represent. While some people do not appreciate that or approve of it, I embrace
it. I feel as though all people should remain transparent, open, and most of
all: honest. Too frequently people just try to fit in using social networking.
This begins to diminish the uniqueness found inherently in all people and
creates this sense of forced conformity so that groups will readily accept them
into their ranks. Perhaps if people did not feel the need to conform to social
norms in everyday life, there would be more diversity, discussion, and controversy
with civility on Facebook and other social networking sites.
The opening lines might get a little repetitive. Definitely clear that you believe in openness and honesty. Really like the ending that you provided, but throughout this post I would provide more specific examples of a controversial post or something from your facebook that represents you.
ReplyDeleteYou do a good job of directly explaining the values that you believe in when it comes to posts on Facebook. It is a good conclusion post to end with. I think once you break it up into distinct paragraphs, it will flow better between the body and conclusion sentences.
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